Haiku Attempt #1

I thought I’d try writing some haikus because I love prose.  I’m not a poet by any means though, so suggestions are always appreciated 🙂  I tend to be overly verbose, so I thought this would be a good challenge for me.

Haiku 1

As night advances

The sun falls on bloody knees

A final goodbye.

Haiku 2

The plip-plop of rain

Echoes throughout the garden

In tune with the frogs.

3 thoughts on “Haiku Attempt #1

    • I meant to reply to this a few days ago :$ Thank you for the comment! Yeah, I like the sun falling down on bloody knees too. I actually tried to use it in my suicide piece, but everyone said it was too purple XD Oh well, I get carried away with myself all the time sometimes. Actually, I didn’t think of the mountains being her knees. That’s brilliant 8D Uh, I’m not that fond of the last line. Figure I could come back to it at a later point in time and revise 🙂

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